Crystalline 1

I whisper the curse
The boy’s tragedy remains
Forever instilled

Fate calls the master
The domino must not fall
No harm continued

Pain is the counsel
The man’s tragedy endured
Never repeated

© 2010-2011 Michael Yost booguloo@live.com

18 responses to “Crystalline 1

    • Learning is part of the fun. I guess this would be better labeled a Senryu or 3 Senryus. I just know the 5,7,5 times 3 felt good as originally written. Your comments are always welcome and appreciated. Thank You.

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  1. You don’t waste words and create a powerful sounding poem in three short stanzas. Like how you wrote it. Cheers

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  2. dear pain:
    aren’t you, the best mentor

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  3. Thanks for sharing this. I know this feeling well. Love and Light, Sender

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  4. I liked it a lot. Beautiful and wise lines.

    =)

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  5. I enjoyed the depth and expression in your poem.

    Anita.

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  6. read it several times and wonder…sounds kind of family tragedies – like father being a drinker and sometimes the son as well..but doesn’t have to be..? i liked the domino picture

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  7. This portray strong emotion. Somehow, I makes me envision a battered boy now grown, committed to avoiding the fate of so many like him of paying it forward.

    Thanks for stopping by my place and commenting. I appreciate it.

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  8. I enjoyed it so much.. thanks for sharing..

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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