Unforgiving

Posted on December 29, 2010 | 76 Comments

You’re unforgivingUnforgiving Despair

Once ate at my tormented soul

But it eats at yours

A higher power forgave

I do not trudge alone now

©2010-2011 Michael Yost

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THURSDAY’S POET RALLY Submission

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76 responses to “Unforgiving”

  1. Monkey Man | December 29, 2010 at 2:58 PM | Reply

    Are you trudging a road to happy destiny? Love the image. Very tortured.

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  2. brian | December 29, 2010 at 3:18 PM | Reply

    whew…i know this one..once ate mine but…keep traveling..

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  3. timkeen40 | December 29, 2010 at 4:17 PM | Reply

    Haunting and enligthening all at the same time.

    Tim

    https://timkeen40.wordpress.com

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  6. Lu Ann | December 29, 2010 at 6:21 PM | Reply

    How come forgiveness is so hard and yet one of the things we need the most?

    🙂

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  7. Jingle | December 29, 2010 at 6:46 PM | Reply

    witty words…
    you make one think.
    Happy Rally…

    🙂

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  8. Louise | December 29, 2010 at 6:56 PM | Reply

    The image is powerful

    and the imagery of your words equally as powerful.

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  9. Becky | December 29, 2010 at 8:04 PM | Reply

    This is really great — mad, righteous… but great.

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  10. Someone is Special | December 29, 2010 at 8:15 PM | Reply

    trudging a road? Man, awesome.. Here is mine, ! Wishes !

    Happy Rally !

    Wish you a very Happy New Year 2011..

    –Someone is Special–

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  11. Kellie Elmore | December 29, 2010 at 9:48 PM | Reply

    Happy Rally Michael! Beautiful prose here. I adore this piece, what a statement in brevity! Bravo on yet another excellent pen! 🙂

    Kellie

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  12. Caribbean Fool | December 29, 2010 at 11:07 PM | Reply

    Great ending. Haven’t checked out your page in a while but definitely was some good poetry. Loved the ending. Very aggressive against a more modest background. Stood out sharply. Great submission.

    crb.

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  13. Marlee-I Mystic | December 30, 2010 at 6:08 AM | Reply

    Funny how the tables turn. Lesson learned.

    Happy Rally

    No Stepping Out Tonight

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  14. Sumit Sarkar | December 30, 2010 at 8:44 AM | Reply

    Nice work..
    “I do not trudge alone now”… 🙂

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  15. thoughtsnotlost | December 30, 2010 at 1:00 PM | Reply

    This speaks to having faith and I thought it was a wonderful read!

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  16. Jillien | December 30, 2010 at 7:39 PM | Reply

    so true! praise the Lord for his infinite mercy!

    JM

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  17. A.B. Thomas | December 31, 2010 at 8:49 AM | Reply

    Great write!

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  18. orange | December 31, 2010 at 8:15 PM | Reply

    Oh my God… how much can be said in a few words about something that gnaws each one of us at one point or another? Great!

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  19. dancingfreak | January 1, 2011 at 5:34 AM | Reply

    not upto the mark….

    yet there is some message..

    something is missing here and im not able to say what…. but this could be better

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  21. Leo (Leonnyes) | January 1, 2011 at 11:16 PM | Reply

    hope all is well with you, Michael… deeper meanings than the words show.. well written verse..

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  22. Sam373 | January 2, 2011 at 3:09 AM | Reply

    The true quest of life but not only! Great write!

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  23. gracefulglider | January 2, 2011 at 10:48 AM | Reply

    wow Boogulo, very profound. I read of letting go in your poem.

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  24. Keshav Ram Narla | January 2, 2011 at 10:51 AM | Reply

    Forgiveness is powerful and only for the strongest

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  25. danroberson | January 2, 2011 at 12:05 PM | Reply

    ….once ate at my tortured soul…..well chosen words we all can relate to. Very nicely done!

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  26. megzone | January 2, 2011 at 10:02 PM | Reply

    Happy new year friend!
    thats a really deep thought there…
    i hope you are doing well now 🙂

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  27. Julie Jordan Scott | January 3, 2011 at 9:27 AM | Reply

    I literally deflated when I finished reading here. Wow.

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  28. lolamouse | January 3, 2011 at 10:51 AM | Reply

    beautiful poem and image. words we all need to hear.

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  29. Jamie Dedes, all rights reserved | January 3, 2011 at 6:51 PM | Reply

    A slow tortured walk into a hard end. Well done …

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  30. jonklassay | January 3, 2011 at 7:03 PM | Reply

    Who is your higher power? Is yours the one that forgave?

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  31. David (1MereMortal) | January 3, 2011 at 7:26 PM | Reply

    “Once ate at my tormented soul”…very profound line that spoke volumes. An excellent poem…thank you for sharing.

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  32. Scent of my heart | January 3, 2011 at 10:40 PM | Reply

    Creative and thought provoking, makes you think how hard is sometimes to forgive and how free you feel after that, despite the pain left somewhere inside! Perfect Rally entry! Thanks for visiting my blog, wishing you a great 2011!

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  33. Chamz | January 4, 2011 at 12:51 AM | Reply

    there are times that are hard to forgive…

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  38. Rhyme Me a Smile | January 6, 2011 at 3:25 PM | Reply

    Very well written!! Some people really need to learn to forgive, eh? 🙂

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  39. The Reason You Come | January 6, 2011 at 3:58 PM | Reply

    Haunting…and true. The inability to forgive would hurt you more than it would hurt the person asking for your forgiveness. Love this! And I love the title, too!

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  40. lizziviggi | January 9, 2011 at 2:50 PM | Reply

    Ouch! I feel your bitterness.

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