200 Foot Memes Square

Posted on February 8, 2011 | 22 Comments

Come in my living tomb
Old Navy senior sale
Ten by twenty foot room

My window, children bloom
Febreze soaks up the stale
Come in my living tomb

Next store old bride new groom
Hammering Trojan nails
Ten by twenty foot room

Memories, weeping womb
Dyson cleans up, prevails
Come in my living tomb

Expecting the word gloom
Westinghouse lamps unveil
Ten by twenty foot room

Sleeping soon, don’t exhume
Ambien does not fail
Come in my living tomb
Ten by twenty foot room

Cabrillo HS seen through the window

Where Glee does outside taping of shows.

This entry was posted in Villanelle and tagged Ambien, Depression, Dyson, Febreze, Memes, sleep, Trojans, Westinghouse. Bookmark the permalink.

22 responses to “200 Foot Memes Square”

belladonna23 | February 8, 2011 at 1:44 PM | Reply

interesting, the repetition of those two sentences really tie the poem together vary well

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- booguloo | February 14, 2011 at 9:14 AM | Reply
  
  Thanks for the visit and for commenting. It was one of those days.
  
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brian miller | February 8, 2011 at 3:34 PM | Reply

wow…some vivid imagery…and solemn despair mixed nicely…

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- booguloo | February 14, 2011 at 9:18 AM | Reply
  
  Thanks Brian.
  
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Old Ollie | February 8, 2011 at 5:02 PM | Reply

Cool and modern. Nice write!

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- booguloo | February 14, 2011 at 9:19 AM | Reply
  
  Glad you stopped by Ollie.
  
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hedgewitch | February 8, 2011 at 6:10 PM | Reply

Very effective use of the villanelle form–and a well-written piece of real substance also.

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- booguloo | February 14, 2011 at 9:20 AM | Reply
  
  Thanks for your input and for stopping by.
  
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RepressedSoul | February 9, 2011 at 1:44 AM | Reply

Modern villanelle. Loved the repetition and the subject matter Michael, know how difficult these are to get right! Thank you for sharing

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- booguloo | February 14, 2011 at 9:32 AM | Reply
  
  Thanks Shan.
  
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Shashi | February 9, 2011 at 5:11 AM | Reply

Hi Michael

10X20 foot room.. what a vivid thought…. and the atmosphere that you have captured here… thanks for sharing..

ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/02/whispers-another-kind-of-valentines-day.html

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- booguloo | February 14, 2011 at 9:33 AM | Reply
  
  Another day in the life..
  
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Eric | February 9, 2011 at 9:40 AM | Reply

I’d rather be in your room-tomb than be subjected to Glee. Nice piece!

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- booguloo | February 14, 2011 at 9:35 AM | Reply
  
  It took 2 nights and a full day to rehearse and tape the super bowl thrilla episode… Got old quick.. smiles
  
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heather grace stewart | February 9, 2011 at 12:59 PM | Reply

You totally rock the modern villanelle.

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- booguloo | February 14, 2011 at 9:35 AM | Reply
  
  Thanks Heather.
  
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Kavita | February 10, 2011 at 10:36 AM | Reply

WOWW!!! It’s got form, feeling, rhyme and reason!!!
I really like your 10×20 tomb-room, Michael… whheeww… it looks like a sanctuary to me!!!

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- booguloo | February 14, 2011 at 9:36 AM | Reply
  
  I guess it’s really Michael’s Lair.. ..smiles..
  
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kolembo | February 12, 2011 at 3:14 PM | Reply

I read this a week ago and I love it. It’s really good.

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Patti | February 14, 2011 at 8:16 AM | Reply

I can completely “feel” your ten by twenty foot room, with its past just oozing from the walls.

Thank you for your kind words on my blog. I really appreciate them.

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- booguloo | February 14, 2011 at 9:39 AM | Reply
  
  And I feel your sincerity.. Thanks!
  
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Steve Isaak | February 14, 2011 at 11:10 AM | Reply

Solid description piece. I usually like a sense of ‘movement’ in my work, but this worked.

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