Nothing like before

Posted on June 29, 2011 | 14 Comments

The world is empty and void without you
As I spin the flesh falls off and drifts into space
Raw emotions left at the pulsating core
With nothing left to embrace
Nothing like before

The cold vacuum ices over the warmth of distant stars
Drawing out the last bit of life I have left
Pulsating less and less till no more
Frozen solid conscious yet alive stalling death
Nothing like before

Or does your conscience just stream and dream
When you die, left spinning, just beginning
The world is empty and void without you anymore
No forgiveness of my sinning
Nothing like before

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14 responses to “Nothing like before”

Becca Givens | June 29, 2011 at 5:24 PM | Reply

Poignant piece ~

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- booguloo | June 29, 2011 at 6:08 PM | Reply
  
  Thanks, I never wrote anything like that before either…
  
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poetryroad | June 29, 2011 at 5:45 PM | Reply

The cold vacuum ices over the warmth of distant stars
this line is brillant in its imagery.
Excellent work!

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- booguloo | June 29, 2011 at 6:05 PM | Reply
  
  Appreciate the comment. Hope to see you again!
  
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danroberson | June 29, 2011 at 6:27 PM | Reply

This is deep and beautifful, filled with imagery and raw with emotion. One of your best! Very well written.

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- booguloo | June 29, 2011 at 7:22 PM | Reply
  
  I’m humbled Dan. Thanks for your comments.
  
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brian | June 29, 2011 at 8:21 PM | Reply

cuts straight to the heart of it…hard read for the emotions it deals with..well writ…

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- booguloo | June 30, 2011 at 7:28 AM | Reply
  
  This what I imagined being separated from God.
  
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Bodhirose | June 29, 2011 at 10:13 PM | Reply

You really seem to be able to tap into your emotional side very well, Michael. I think that’s a good thing. I appreciate this raw, real emotion.

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- booguloo | June 30, 2011 at 7:26 AM | Reply
  
  Just a memory that had to be told. Thanks for the lovely comment.
  
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Kay Salady | June 30, 2011 at 7:33 AM | Reply

I liked this piece very much, especially the last stanza. Thank you!

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- booguloo | June 30, 2011 at 10:13 AM | Reply
  
  I don’t know about others, but a lot of times The last stanza comes to me first. This is one of those cases. Thanks for the visit and the comment.
  
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moondustwriter | July 2, 2011 at 4:39 PM | Reply

Michael – I can tell you were feeling “void” “emptiness” as you wrote this. Great feeling and impact on the reader

thanks for your One Shot support

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- booguloo | July 2, 2011 at 6:05 PM | Reply
  
  Thanks for the visit. I wish there was a way to keep the one shot up longer than one day. I know it goes to archives eventually, but there’s a lot to read.
  
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