Promises Never Given

Promises never given
Didn’t leave her prepared
When you gave her the news
That you wouldn’t be there

It satisfied your need
To feel justified
When you left her alone
After saying goodbye

Because you told her
From the very start
Promises never given
Still broke her heart

That’s when she pulled
Out the forty five
Shot you dead in the chest
But cried as you died

© 2011 Michael Yost

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http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/2011/08/poetry-potluck-week-48-passionate.html

39 responses to “Promises Never Given

  1. I liked the turn at the end of this poem Michael. 🙂

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  2. Wow – wasn’t expecting that ending! Great job 🙂

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  3. That’ll teach ya! Enjoyed this! Til the “end”!

    Here’s my offering for Potluck 48: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/14/the-lake/

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  4. powerfully sad, thanks for sharing..

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  5. Whoa! You took me by complete surprise with that ending, Michael!
    Excellent stuff…that’s what you definitely call a killer poem (no pun intended)!

    Remove These Satin Sheets…

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  6. ha ha ha ha I love that macabre feel, well done!!! 🙂
    thanks for the laugh 🙂

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  7. Quiton Terantino a little here. Nice lil poem, then BANG, KILL BILL.
    Got my attention. Nice job.

    She Plays Me

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  8. As mentioned above…. Wasn’t expecting that ending ! But it’s GREAT ! U never can be sure how another person will react …

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  9. A crime of passion … Great poem!

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  10. wow this was brutal way to die…but i guess in love there is war…….brilliant..

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  12. Hilarious ending for which I was totally unprepared, since I’d been reading love poems all morning (: Fun verse!

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  13. Hey, she never promised she wouldn’t shoot! This is awesome!

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  14. wow a great write with a fabulous twisting end …

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  15. Oooo… remind me never to give a promise…lol
    Very good piece Boo~!

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  16. last lines took me by surprise,, never break a woman’s heart..they are bittersweet honeys..:) nice one!

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  17. well.. dang… I’m not one to promise. Leads to disappointment. And clearly, a little bang bang and you’re dead. lol

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  18. That ending was too cool! I don’t know a woman or man that hasn’t felt like doing that at least once in their life . Great poem! Blessings 🙂

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  19. Hello again.
    Just dropping by to congratulate you on an awesome interview over at Jingle Poetry!
    Great responses.

    Enjoy the rest of the week, my friend!

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  20. Oh dear!

    Ditto Andy by the way …

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