Authoring

Posted on February 4, 2012 | 16 Comments

What we’re becoming
The blinds waving in the AC
Sun scattering across the room
Smoke curls disrupting

Lumbar shifting
Carpal tunneling
Hose bulging
Glasses sliding

Flat rooting beer
Two thousand left
Driven by the clicking
Pausing only to pee

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16 responses to “Authoring”

Kerry O'Connor | February 5, 2012 at 9:33 AM | Reply

How well you have captured the urgency and single-mindedness of the author at the last stretch of his work.

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- booguloo | February 5, 2012 at 9:39 AM | Reply
  
  Thanks Kerry.
  
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isadoragruye | February 5, 2012 at 9:56 AM | Reply

To add to Kerry’s insightful comments, I would also say there is a Hunter S. Thompson like quality of resignation here, how becoming the ordinary and inevitable is in a way the last expected event and it kind of pisses us off from time to time. I give this piece the nice cage seal of poemy goodness. Thanks for sharing!!!

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- booguloo | February 5, 2012 at 10:09 AM | Reply
  
  Thanks. I’m glad this free verse is being accepted as it is. I’m trying to let it go and flow.
  
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Mr. Walker | February 5, 2012 at 10:55 AM | Reply

I like the movement of each stanza: becoming to disrupting, shifting to sliding, and beer to pee.

Richard

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- booguloo | February 5, 2012 at 11:30 AM | Reply
  
  Thanks. Taken under advisement.
  
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ayala | February 5, 2012 at 12:08 PM | Reply

Good capture 🙂

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- booguloo | February 5, 2012 at 12:19 PM | Reply
  
  Thanks Ayala.
  
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Grace | February 5, 2012 at 12:11 PM | Reply

I read Kerry’s comment and understood your share.

I like how you captured his intense focus on writing (except mother nature’s call) ~

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- booguloo | February 5, 2012 at 12:25 PM | Reply
  
  Thanks for joining in. I like being a realist when it comes to writing; so just as his hose is bulging he’ll also have to tend to other things. I may consider your advice and find another angle; I just like the abrupt comical ending. smiles…
  
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Daydreamertoo | February 6, 2012 at 4:58 AM | Reply

A fun read. Yes, I think you captured writers and what they do to not be interrupted in their ‘flow’…haha.. Nice, concise, and well captured. 🙂

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- booguloo | February 6, 2012 at 10:41 AM | Reply
  
  I appreciate that! Thanks.
  
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Taylor | February 7, 2012 at 4:15 PM | Reply

love this, fun wonders.

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- booguloo | February 7, 2012 at 4:24 PM | Reply
  
  Thank You.
  
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zongrik | February 10, 2012 at 11:05 PM | Reply

carpal tunneling is funny

elephant slave

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- booguloo | February 11, 2012 at 6:44 AM | Reply
  
  Thanks Tammy.
  
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