“Don’t say it.”
“Say what?”
“What you’re thinking.”
“Man, my feet hurt, it is cold and dark out here and I got to take a shit and you want to play guessing games?”
(c) 2012 Michael Yost 3/16
This weekend’s www.trifecta.com challenge is to write a story entitled ‘Lost’ in exactly 33 words. The word ‘lost’ can only appear in the title, not your 33 words. Any reference to the TV show could result in another visit to see the editors in the Trifecta offices.
oh noze . . . great job, Michael. Such Manly-Man talk! 🙂
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Eh? You know whatta I mean? Good. smiles…
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Ha! Nicely done.
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Thanks Kelly.
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haha I can definitely understand your frustration. very nice
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You gotta have a little frustration in your life… however, not mine… smile
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Sounds like a few weekends I used to have.
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I used to hate it when I woke up with only one shoe.
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LOL
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Good it worked.
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Where’s a damn toilet when you need it?!
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Hope he remember, “Leaves of three, let it be.” If they can’t find a toilet.
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Spot on. I have the privilege of living with 3 men, all of whom hate guessing games and love informing me of when they need to take a shit. Stories abound!
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Really lol!
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Very funny!
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Happy you enjoyed it. thanks.
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Best use of crude language (didn’t feel like forced shock value) that I’ve read recently. Felt genuine, with that necessary touch of mystery. Well done.
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Yeah, I felt poop or crap wouldn’t cut being authentic. Thanks. I appreciate your comments.
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Hilarious. Awesome. I love this one. I thought about how funny it would be to write from the perspective of being lost. I’m glad I didn’t because you rocked it.
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It was the first thing that came to me so I went with it. Thanks.
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This was funny, and the dialogue was authentic. I could totally picture it!
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Thanks, Janna.
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Thanks for linking up to Trifextra this weekend. I think you nailed it here. The dialogue is definitely authentic, without seeming gratuitous, and the whole thing is both funny and relatable. Really nice stuff, booguloo. Hope to see you back on Monday.
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Thank you kind folks.
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Great! And how come we all know what being talked about? Makes it a good story, that’s for sure! I can see it all now. 😆
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Thanks for stopping by and commenting. It’s called a narrative, so it’s just me narrating. Smiles
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I have had this VERY conversation, and I’m sure I’m not alone. Great job of capturing a slice of life.
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Hope it worked out for you.
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Ha ha ha ha! So real. Blessed be.
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You know what they say. Stuff happens… smile
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Oh, Michael, too funny. I can see them now… at least it’s dark. Hope the one who needs to go has a few tissues on hand! Like the bears…
Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/03/17/lets-get-lost-trifecta/
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I can see Costello with the problem. oh Abbbbbbb Buuuuuuuuutt
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I imagine two guys on their very first camping or hunting trip. Nice!
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That one works really well.
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That’s funny! I especially liked what the second person was really thinking instead of “We’re lost”
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Thanks. I just imagined what I would have said; didn’t have enough words left to express what I wanted to do though. Not knowing if you need to pass gas or not is definitely not comfortable.
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Brilliant. I loved the first character’s demand, and the failure of the respondent to heed.
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Ha ha. Got to have some fun doing some of these.
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lol, that was splendid and soooooooooo funny, another good one! 🙂
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This Trifecta Challenge really helps get the creative juices flowing. You should join in.
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Exactly why I only hike well marked trails.
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You got that right.
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Oopsie! Hopefully someone didn’t take a dump in a patch of poison ivy, I’ve heard that’s a real pain in the ass. This made me LOL… love your take on the prompt, booguloo!
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Gratitude is great but cash is better…. dial BR 549 have your credit card handy. Thanks for the visit today and letting me have a little more fun.
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Been lost for hours before on a hike around Lake Tahoe. Sounds kinda like the conversation that took place between us hikers. Funny take!
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I think we’ve all experienced a cheek squeezing event at one time or another. At least in the woods you can have some privacy and if worse comes to worse you always have underwear (thong wearers should take this into consideration when hiking) that can be used for toilet paper (not that I’d know anything about such problems….ha ha). I care about what you think; I think the question now should be whether or not you care what I think. smiles…
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